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It's a stabbing sight
Letting in the morning with a crack of the shades
And you forget you could page-turn horizons
Waft through free territory
Where acres are just beds
Made of fresh land

Wrinkles in the river
Tell remembered times
About old languages that could make you cry
About soft beds that carve away canyons
A speaking voice lifted from the earth
Begging you to remember
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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-11-07
bed by *anotherforestfire ( Suggested by Mrs-Freestar-Bul and Featured by thorns )
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh, I love this. It's deep and mysterious but gentle and soft and it makes me think.
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
thank you!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I was so happy to see you could get such recognition! You probably don't remember me, and that is fine. However I cannot help myself when I see wonderful talent (to which I've had the privilege of coming into contact with before); I grow extremely excited! Finally recognition is being given to your beautiful writing, and what a piece this poem turned out to be! Your word choice is superb; the imagery shifts flowingly into place, with the same fluency of your sentences! Your metaphors really bring this to life, along with the emotion hidden behind text and stanza. I just found the read beautiful, for the concept was strong and took strong root within my heart!

Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece, and I'm so happy for you! So.... :megaphone:Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :megaphone:
In my opinion, it was much deserved! :D
(I apologize for being a day late: I couldn't post this any sooner. Congratulations to you all the same!)
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
I do remember you! thank you so much, I don't know what to say, I'm not used to so much positivity about my writing...it is very much appreciated
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
Well Done. Congratulations on your D.D!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you!
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FaerieChozen Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
beautiful
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thanks :]
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the-kings-pawn Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i am painting this above my bed
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
haha go right ahead
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the-kings-pawn Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
it's just, someone finally gets how i feel about where i sleep lol. nice job, a well deserved DD
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SparkiSparkiBoomMan Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this has amazing flow!
=}
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you!
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salmonella-poisoned Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
stunning imagery. I love this
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thanks :]
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The flow is superb!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you!
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Moonshade26 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is really good. congrats on ur dd
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you!
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AFineWar Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on your Daily Deviation :clap:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thanks!
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jennedy Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012   Writer
so beautiful.
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you :]
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And you forget you could page-turn horizons

What a gorgeous line. :heart: And a gorgeous poem. I feel like there's something delicate about it; like that feeling of being caught between sleeping and waking. Beautiful work.
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you so much!
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012   General Artist
Eeeeeeeeeeee! Congratulations on the DD, dear one! :tighthug:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
haha I'm sorry, I don't think I was paying attention whenever I left that comment, I'm not used to giving this many thank yous!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   General Artist
It's totally alright, I wish I were the one to have suggested it anyway and *Mrs-Freestar-Bul is wonderful for doing so. :love:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
haha thank you, she really is!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   General Artist
Mmh-hmm:heart:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I suggested it :) Happy it got the DD finally. Congrats :clap:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
I'm sorry, I actually knew that haha I don't know what I was doing when I left that comment...thank you so much though, this was a great boost in confidence
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So happy for you. You totally deserve it :)
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012   Writer
This is beautiful! Well deserved <3
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you :]
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FirstAndLastMen Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
incroyablé!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you!
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345652SW38 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Writer
hey! CONGRATULATIONS! :party: :love:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
hey! thank you :]
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345652SW38 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student Writer
you're so welcome! how have you been? [feel free to fail to answer for awhile because i'm sure you have about a bajillion messages right now]
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
I've been pretty good, how about you? and I definitely had more messages than usual, I've slowly thanked everyone today
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345652SW38 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Student Writer
wow that's impressive! i wouldn't have been able to get through everyone XD

it's so great to hear that you're doing well. i'm really happy for you c: and i'm pretty okay. definitely not bad, but not fantastic either. you know, same old XP
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BakuSpirit Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist
the lack of comments on this is absurd
beautiful ♥
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you, this is definitely the most comments I've seen
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely first stanza...and second stanza.

Where acres are just beds made of fresh land

congrats on the DD. it is all beautiful.
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
thank you so much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :heart:
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