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(Contains: sexual themes)
Skin smeared in sheets
Caught like your lip in my teeth
We fumble through thickets and find the wood floor
Where the rhythm pummels my unlocked door

If a mouth is a kiss
My body is a church
Let my spine be the arch that leads from heaven to earth

A worm through the peach, I find you in me
Coiling like rivers flooding the sea
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Churchby dy-ad

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for a contest~

I won! [link]
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AGMeade Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013   Writer
This is absolutely beautiful. It's incredibly sexy, of course, but I was more caught by the slight thread of unease in the last stanza. Congrats on your DLD!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
thank you so much!
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Pr0metheusUnb0und Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Exquisite.
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
thanks!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013   Writer
:iconcongratssignplz: on the DLD "Pick of the Day"! This is a piece that demands a few readings, plus I read it aloud. I'm glad you won the contest and love the metaphors and similies here. Thank you
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
thanks so much!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
those last two lines are such a perfect ending! congratulations on the well deserved DLD!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
thank you very much!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our "Pick of the Day". It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
Congrats!!!!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012
thank you!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
Beautifully written. I was so caught up in it I hardly noticed how fast I was reading it, it truly pulls you in!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
Thanks so much!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
You're very welcome!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I happened to see the contest winners, and decided to take a look!

I found this poem to be incredibly good! Your metaphors and similes were beautiful! This whole poem showed creativity, artistry, and originality. I was very impressed!

I have to say I also loved the lines
"Let my spine be the arch that leads from heaven to earth"

and
"A worm through the peach, I find you in me
Coiling like rivers flooding the sea"


You had superb word choice and a very interesting take on the theme. Usually I stay away from reading things with such themes because they either come out too inappropriate for my tastes, or all desire sometimes with no careful construction or artful representation. I felt that this did the art form of poetry justice, while also showing others the theme of sex can be expertly displayed by staying true to the beautiful way of art.

It was indeed a pleasure (is that bad word choice considering the poem? :giggle:) to read, and I very much liked it. Fantastic job, and I hope you continue to write!
Also, congratulations on winning! :party:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012
wow, thank you...I will definitely continue writing! maybe I'll try a few more contests
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winterkate Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Student Writer
Try more contests~ :D I think you'll do really well! (Plus it gives you easy inspiration ;) )
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
I will definitely if I find any that interest me
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winterkate Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Student Writer
You should check out my group! We're having a contest right now that might spark your fancy :)
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:iconnullibicity:
Nullibicity Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's personal choice, but I would greatly encourage you to do so: contests always help with new perspective, often confidence, and overall are wonderful learning experiences!

I wish you luck with your future writing :hug:
Take care~
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forevermone Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is some sexy writing! :heart: it!
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
thank you!
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forevermone Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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JellyBeanBullet Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:O that was... hot lol
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
lol thanks!
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: I just... :heart:
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
haha thank you!
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome. :D
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
wow ..
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dy-ad Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
I wasn't sure if that was a good wow or bad at first haha, thank you!
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
yeah youre on my list of favorite writers on here
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:icondy-ad:
dy-ad Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
that's a rare thing for me to hear, thank you
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
ive got a list, and yeah youve made it onto it
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